Recapping on my Freytag’s Pyramid Challenge Part One to write a punchy 500 words (or less) short story using exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, denouement, with a dog and cat as the two main characters.
I did the Freytag’s Pyramid Challenge myself – because I had just at that particular moment made up the whole idea! Apologies if some smarter person has already done this. The following short story is my effort featuring an evening in the life of an unruly family.
You can participate in Freytag’s Pyramid Challenge in your own time by posting on your own blog. Add your wordcount and use the name ‘Freytag’ in your catchy title. I would love to see your work, your words or illustrations. NO prizes, no follow-up, just the satisfaction of completing an exercise.
Let’s see what drama your dog, cat and the Pyramid created – here’s mine!
“Hey Freytag, Look What I Wrote”
DANGEROUS DINNER The house and garden were big enough for Claudia and Doug to avoid seeing each other during daylight hours. Evening meal times were another matter. When Mr Owner came home at nightfall with Mrs Owner and all the young Owners, tempers flared and teeth were bared. ‘Such an uncivilised family’ Claudia thought. She was civilised enough not to hiss and spit, even when someone trod on her tail. ‘Nice manners, nice manners,’ she purred, rubbing against various legs. Her eyes searched for unattended food and her nose twitched at the delicious aromas from cooking pots. Creating his own maelstrom, Doug ran in excited circles around the farmhouse-style kitchen. He drooled on the tiles and whined hopefully at the oblivious family. Usually Baby Owner was good for a glob or two of mashed potato. Meanwhile, Claudia prepared to take advantage of pre-meal morsels already on the pine table. While human mayhem raged about the room, the benefits of salad fiercely debated, she crunched her dry fish-shaped pellets and prepared her muscles for some feline action. With legs bunched, and nice manners forgotten, Claudia was ready to spring. A quick leap onto the chair, then up and over onto the table. Thump! She landed in a dish of cooked pasta. Whoa! The dish slid across the table with Claudia clinging on top. It was speeding towards the edge. Too shocked to miaow, she imagined herself crashing to the floor and thought “What a waaaste.” The edge arrived and disappeared and she was flying off the table. Below her, Doug leapt up and clamped his huge jaws on the rim of the dish. Of course, the dish stopped dead, but Claudia and the pasta continued to fly across the kitchen, headed straight towards the big white bulk of the refrigerator. Someone caught Claudia in mid-flight. She was saved! “Eew,” said First Teenage Owner as pasta squelched between her fingers. Second Teenage Owner laughed. Claudia felt cheese squash against her long, luxuriant fur and shuddered. Doug dropped the dish and began slurping up bits of mangled pasta. “Not wasted after all,” she thought with an angry flick of her tail. Mr Owner praised Doug for his good catch; First Teenage Owner was praised for her quick thinking; and Claudia? Well, Claudia was chewing on a juicy piece of steak she had snaffled from Doug’s bowl when his back was turned. Supervision was tightened, orders were given; no fighting, no talking with mouths full, pets dine separately. Stiff-legged with indignity and cheese, Claudia felt she had received the harshest penalty – being cleaned up by dog-breath Doug and his rough pink tongue. Slurp! Everyone sat down to a fine dinner and calmness descended on the kitchen. Pasta was now Claudia’s least favourite meal but Doug grinned with satisfaction. ♥ Gretchen Bernet-Ward 2018 Wordcount: 462
♥ Gretchen Bernet-Ward